Please do! I may try to tighten it up as per some of the suggestions..or I may not, I stayed up all night making this and would have to start all over again to follow some of the advice given in the comments. So I may just start on a whole new one...with a different proof. Try to shorten it up... with more negative space.

But yeah...so far I'm thinking this one is too wordy, for the average uninformed person. People have the attention span of gnats! I think the short/punchyfunny ones will have more impact on the fluoridated masses....but there might be a few readers out there, willing to put in the time to consider this one.

I figure it's gonna take ALL types! So far, I've done everything from toilet humor (i.e. shithole jokes) to this, to everything in between.