> these percentages are well within the range expected as an outcome for this age group of persons whose other underlying medical conditions are unknown.
Wait, I see, okay this last part of the sentence got removed, I'm too sleepy.
Anyway, I would have expected that paper to mention that there are an insane amount of 1st trimester deaths, and it doesn't.
And she in fact removed the bad percentages, this means she acknowledged that these made no real sense.
But then I would mention what these percentages were hiding underneath/added new ones stating that this many deaths occurred during 1st trimester and that this is clearly not normal, and this was not done.