It's very wordy. You really need six pages of mostly text to convey the important ideas? Few will read all that. Who is your target audience? Media? They might read it. General public? Unlikely to read it. It's a smartphone world out there.
It's very wordy. You really need six pages of mostly text to convey the important ideas? Few will read all that. Who is your target audience? Media? They might read it. General public? Unlikely to read it. It's a smartphone world out there.