for the anon in last bread who wanted a review of his on-pager, I had a few more thoughts:

>>586267 (last bread)

Need to rework the second sentence in the first paragraph, It's lacking appropriate grammatical structure. I tried to rewrite it, but realized I'm not sure what you're really saying.

Simply it seems you are saying that banking dynasties, oil barons and international financiers exert their corrupting influence and control over current and former world leaders, the media and minions so vile and atrocious that their names mustn't be mentioned.

Also, in general you are using a lot of passive tense, which weakens the message. You should try to tell the story using active verbs. For example, "A secret mystery poster, Q, narrates the story, leaving hints about his true identity as the plot unfolds."

>>586377

Thank you baker, that was some nimble baking.

>>586405

see >>>>586386

I think what you've done is great. The copy needs a little polishing.