>>7290546 (pb) RE: iPhone-movie (The Great Awakening)
Great short movie; needs a couple copy edits and slowdown…
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Delete “a” in the following:
“Pedophilia is a intertwined in all they do”.
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Replace “your” with “you” in the following:
“We know what your were planning”.
I’m a speed reader but have difficulty taking in all the graphics/ print and captions within the current time setting of frames; more effective if you can slow down.