>>7311662 (pb)

>>7311953 (pb)

Those are really good critiques. Thank you.

I’ll have to think on the they/you point you mentioned. I see your point for continuity. The reason those are “you” is it just felt more aggressive/powerful/confident speaking directly to the cabal like that.

What do you think of putting the entire thing into a You context?

Good idea on the crimes against children point. I’ll have to replace one of the church headlines though. Instead of adding one.

Have to keep the timing right with buildups and breakdowns of the music track.

Thx again anon!