Anonymous ID: 866a6b April 19, 2020, 4:28 a.m. No.8849120   🗄️.is 🔗kun   >>9148 >>9168

I'm working on a short story and I wondered if anybody could give me any feedback or would like to discuss any of the elements in it. I'm just gonna drop some screens of what I have now and see if I get any replies.

Anonymous ID: 866a6b April 19, 2020, 4:41 a.m. No.8849175   🗄️.is 🔗kun   >>9180 >>9183

>>8849148

I'm a writer like my father before me.

 

But, really, I was walking my dog a couple hours ago and having a smoke. I live on a one-way, and I pictured these two characters and immediately had their names and started to develop some of their backstory.

 

I knew Milly had something to show/tell Billie, but I wasn't sure what it was until I got to writing that part. Thank God for an occasionally near-photographic memory. :)

Anonymous ID: 866a6b April 19, 2020, 4:51 a.m. No.8849205   🗄️.is 🔗kun   >>9261

>>8849168

I'm wondering how far into fantasy to take the next parts. Does Milly have a hunch or does she witness something? Maybe I'll go the supernatural/spiritual experience route.

 

I appreciate your feedback, and probably heed your advice after this.

 

Hopefully I will work it more soon.

 

>>8849183

Cool digits on your ID. No, 'Billie' is just how his mother must have spelled it, or how he decided to spell it when he was a young teenager. Honestly, I just like the awkwardness of the names:

>BIllie and Milly Marvis

But thanks for asking. It had occurred to me that it might seem feminine. I think I'll keep it anyway.