She seems nice.
If you wish to sound like an uneducated lout, that is your business. We will give your scribbling the exact respect it deserves.
Grammar is the foundation of language. Without it, language cannot exist. Your argument for "casual" writing is actually an argument for being illiterate.
I choose to be literate.
I too gave you a first draft. The difference is telling. Writing well, like any worthy pursuit, requires time and effort. Try it.