Hello! I have edits/proofreading corrections for you - I took so long, the General thread finished, so TY for making this thread. And thank you for writing!!
It is not a joke when anons say that editors/proofreaders are standing by, ready to help whenever needed!
I will tag each Part# post with the edits/proofreading corrections for it.
>>9538466 Part 1
>>9538490 Part 1 orphan sentence
→ None of these are editorial (changing the information or the tone) - all just grammatical.
>Also it looks like
Eliminate also, begin first sentence:
It looks like
>the 25th amendment ruote
route
> refusing national guard
National Guard
>child traffic/ pedo shit being on one small
being only one
> They also have been weakening law enforcement's ability to act via, stand down orders
>referred to as "new cycle"
"news cycle"
Remove , after via
>the stars
eliminate extra space
Part 2
>the ineffectiveness
eliminate extra space
>government was unable to or choose
was unable or chose not to
>card but it is almost dead, they will claim
insert so after comma: almost dead, so they will
>useful later hence the reason
later, hence
>people forget easy
people forget quickly
> new cry became we do not
"we do not enough hospitals, ventilators, or protective equipment,"
>the nation stockpile was ill equipped
the national stockpile was ill-equipped
>set aside money to repurchase supplies
replenish supplies
>over the last decade -either through negligence
(the 2nd sentence is a fragment)
>lucky here for example NY
lucky here for example, NY
>Had Trump back down
backed down
>and went the easy route
gone the easy route
gave them to NY, other
> instead you told them
instead, he told them
>for political reasons", this
for political reasons." This
For some of these, it was easier to re-write the sentence. You will see.
Part 3
We produced way more than we needed and actually still have auto plants making ventilators, the because America needs to rebuild our stockpile and the rest of the world is going to need them also.
> a "great game" move, in order to try
a "great game" move in order to try
It was meant as a way to say "look, China is saving the world while the US only cares about itself," with the goal of swaying countries to China.
> They also during this time started buying up
Also during this time, they started buying up
>and even larger in store places were sold out.
I'm not sure what you are trying to say here - larger stores? larger stores' stock was depleted?
>They had people in the US actually going to stores and buying them all up and mailing them back to China. The goal being that could control pretty much all the supplies needed to combat the virus.
The Chinese government had people in the US go to stores and buy all the masks and mail them to China, so they could control all the supplies needed to combat the virus.
>That is why the whole US is stealing other countries' masks popped up in the news.
That is why the whole " the US is stealing other countries' masks" popped up in the news.
> At the same time you had companies like haines, my pillow switching over
At the same time, US companies like Haines and My Pillow switching over
>point in the timeline the virus/lockdown
point in the timeline, the virus/lockdown
Part 4
>able to provide cover they moved
able to provide cover, they moved
>TP being a good example, another being meat.
TP is one good example, another is meat.
>China owns a lot of the meat processing plants in the US and they started and still are being shut down because of the virus.
There are two conflicting statements in one sentence - China started what?
Are you saying:
China started shutting down their meat processing and packing plants, and they are still shut down today.
If not, it needs clarifying.
>bulk packs of meat occasionally fairly cheap, I saw a
occasionally for fairly cheap. I saw a
>a couple weeks ago which was obviously meant
that was obviously meant
> For the most part people are blind to this and all they see is the items are out that day and in the back of their mind these images build up giving them a false perception of reality because all they remember is the empty shelves and the media has been making sure to remind them every chance they get.
For the most part, people are blind to this and all they see is the items are sold out that day, and it reminds them of the media imagery of empty store shelves which gave them a false perception of reality, and the media has been making sure to remind them every chance they get.
Part 5
> cured the virus, the death of George Flyod, locking people up
cured the virus: the death of George Floyd. Locking people up
>them a little restless and those that were
them a little restless, and those that were
>was instantly deemed racists
racist
>get people in the streets, they were already
get people in the streets- they were already
>Now they could have just ran with it there
Now they could have just run with it there
>some valid grievances for the destruction
some valid grievances, for the destruction
>Next the media runs the stories
Next, the media ran the stories
> supremists of whom were heavily armed
supremacists, some of whom were heavily armed
>media wants you to believe, they needed a fall guy for some of the actions of antifa, someone
media wants you to believe. They needed a fall guy for some of the actions of Antifa, someone
> and send the cities into chaos. Eventually having
and send the cities into chaos; eventually it would spill out
> I started writing about.After
need a space after the period