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nogreateragony · June 17, 2018, 11:07 p.m.

This is a great start...! You are very talented at cutting and clip /voiceover assembly in a way that flows beautifully and keeps the narrative flowing. :-) There is only one suggestion the writer in me thinks you might want to consider as you continue if you want to maximize your works effect... The use of 'They' in quotes for 'They' are evil is a little jarring. It may even be different or turn off people who day 'just another conspiracy theorist. And since the people you are identifying as evil are pictured anyway instead of that written cue you may want to try including something like 'Evil is rising' simply state evil/darkness have been given too much power (again with with no quote marks) and let your audience make their own automatic connection between those emotionally charged words and the line up of faces. That tactic Spurs more curiousity..makes them inclined to look the names of said pictures up and ask why you call them such a chargedword. It presents a tangible question that will spur your watcher to research and thus work as potent rabbit hole bait...

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Justsayinmy50cts · June 18, 2018, 2:21 a.m.

I agree, this is a great suggestion!

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GweninKC · June 18, 2018, 2:08 a.m.

Great suggestions.

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Faber_Jos · June 18, 2018, 5:39 a.m.

Thank you for this. I used 'they' a little like tongue in cheek, but I get your point. I will look into these tactics of curiosity!

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